There is an old saying that goes,” The camera never lies.” What do you think about the old saying? Some people are in favor of the saying, while other people are opposed to it. As far as I am concerned, I don’t support the old saying.
With the advent of modern technology, the functions of camera become better and better. In the past, we use traditional cameras to take pictures. Nowadays, most people use digital cameras to take photos instead. The function of digital camera is filled with variety. In addition to taking pictures, we can use it to video tape or record.
The most incredible thing is that we can use digital cameras to revise pictures. In recent years, revising picture is quite common. Many people try to use digital camera or computer to revise original pictures. Consequently, they become different from the original pictures completely. For example, many celebrities like to put some revised pictures to the Internet for the sake of having a attractive appearance. However, it will cause misunderstand for the public.
I think that photograph is a fictitious thing. Some people look beautiful in the picture originally. Furthermore, it may also be a shooting angle problem. On the other hand, some people even use the software to revise original pictures in order to look good on those pictures. The software can help us remove scar, remove acne, whiten, and so on. To sum up, I am opposed to the saying” The camera never lies.” I think that we can visit album of other people in leisure time. However, you will find that some pictures on the blogs are revised, so we should not believe photos excessively.
With the advent of modern technology, the functions of camera become better and better. In the past, we use traditional cameras to take pictures. Nowadays, most people use digital cameras to take photos instead. The function of digital camera is filled with variety. In addition to taking pictures, we can use it to video tape or record.
The most incredible thing is that we can use digital cameras to revise pictures. In recent years, revising picture is quite common. Many people try to use digital camera or computer to revise original pictures. Consequently, they become different from the original pictures completely. For example, many celebrities like to put some revised pictures to the Internet for the sake of having a attractive appearance. However, it will cause misunderstand for the public.
I think that photograph is a fictitious thing. Some people look beautiful in the picture originally. Furthermore, it may also be a shooting angle problem. On the other hand, some people even use the software to revise original pictures in order to look good on those pictures. The software can help us remove scar, remove acne, whiten, and so on. To sum up, I am opposed to the saying” The camera never lies.” I think that we can visit album of other people in leisure time. However, you will find that some pictures on the blogs are revised, so we should not believe photos excessively.
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回覆刪除Hi Nina
回覆刪除Your writing is good. As usual, you have a great organization, and you are very good at
using linking words. I'm impressed.
Nevertheless, I don't think Body Paragraph I echoed the thesis statement. Could you double check it? If you agree with what I said, you may like to either delete your BPI or combine it with your introduction. I made this suggest because BPI is more like an introduction to me. Even so, I still picked some mistakes from your paraggraph 2. Please check your mistakes before taking any further actions.
Moreover, here are some mistakes found in your article. I'll be happy to see you revise them.
1. Some people are in favor of the saying, while other people are opposed to the saying.
第二個the saying請改成代名詞
2. As far as I am concerned, I am not support to the old saying.
這地方有動詞上的問題I am not support
3. With the advance of modern technology, the function of camera become better and better.
第一、是with the advent
第二、become還是becomes還是function單複數搞錯
4. In the past, we use traditional camera to take pictures. Nowadays, most people use digital camera to take photos instead.
第一、這兩句連接得很好，instead的位置也很美，但是照相機是可數名詞喔
5. In addition to taking pictures, we can use it to video tape or record.
6. The most incredible thing is that we can use digital camera to revise pictures.
照相機是可數名詞
7. In recent years, revising picture is quite common. Many people try to use digital camera or computer to revise original pictures. Consequently, they become different from the original pictures absolutely.
我想用 completely比aboslutely合適
8.I think that photograph is a fictitious thing. Some people look beautiful in the picture originally.
我覺得這兩句文意上連得不順
9. On the other hand, some people even use the software to revise original pictures in order to show a good-looking face.
把in order to show a good-looking face簡單改成in order to look good on those pictures較好
10 I think that we can visit album of other people in leisure time, but we should not believe photos excessively. 這一句其實沒有完整, 有東西沒說出來, 之道是什麼嗎? 請加上去