2010年5月13日 星期四

Journal 3:Labor Education

Labor education is an essential thing for every freshman in Chaoyang. It can cultivate our attitude toward working and spirit of service. Some people think that it is a meaningful thing in our university life. However, most people always complain about it. What do you think about it?

In my university life, I often heard a lot of people complaining about it, and I am no exception. I think the distribution of workload about labor education is a little bit unfair. For example, some people's works are simple and relaxing, while others works are difficult. People whose works are difficult will spend much time than other people completing this job. Sometimes, it will even affect our lunchtime. In addition, I hope to shorten time of labor education. Labor education is divided into three sessions. Some sweep the floor in the morning, some at noon, and still some others in the afternoon. I think people who sweep the floor in the morning are quite painstaking. They have to get up early every day. It is an annoying thing. I think school should take new measures. For instance, students sweep the floor once a week. Maybe the measures will bring less complaint.

Although most people often complain about labor education, there are some advantages for us. Labor education can help us make it a good rule to clean environment around. Furthermore, we can also gain some experiences from labor education. Above all, labor education can help us broaden interpersonal relationship. During labor education, we can even get acquainted with a great number of different friends. Maybe they can help me in the future when I face with difficulties.

Recently, I often think that I have already swept the floor for about two semesters. That is to say, labor education is about to end. As soon as I think I will complete labor education, I am in a good mood. I believe most people expect that the labor education can end soon.

1 則留言:

  1. Hi Nina,

    Again, this piece of writing is quite good (I guess you're tired of hearing a repeated compliment. Yet, what can I say? You're really good at writing.)


    其他小錯如下:

    1. Labor education is an essential thing for every freshman in Chaoyang. It can cultivate our attitude toward working and spirit of service.
    寫得真好

    2.Some people think that it is a meaningful thing in our university life. However, most people always complain about it. What do you think about it?
    Good writing

    3. In my university life, I often heard a lot of people complaining about it, and I am no exception. I think the distribution of job about labor education is a little bit unfair.
    job可數喔, 把job改成 workload

    4.For example, some people whose works are simple and relaxing, while other people whose works are difficult.
    你這一整句的關代剛好都錯
    這兩句用簡單句型就可以了, 改改看
    還有other people用 others就行了

    5.People whose works are difficult will take much time than other people to complete this job.
    這一句的關代就對了
    但take要改spend因為主詞是人
    所以to complete也要改成completing

    6. Some people sweep the floor in the morning. Another people sweep the floor at noon. The other people sweep the floor in the afternoon.
    用some..., some..., still some others...
    所以Some sweep the floor in the morning, some at noon, and still some others in the afternoon. 因為都是sweep the floor所以就可以不寫了 上次教mechanics時有提到 (3/19)


    7. I think people who sweep the floor in the morning are quite painstaking. They have to get up early every day. It is an annoying thing. I think school can take new measures.
    寫得很good
    can用should會不會好一點

    8. Although most people often complain about labor education, there are some advantages for us. Labor education can help us make it a good rule to clean environment around. Furthermore, we can also gain some experiences from labor education. Above all, labor education can help us broaden interpersonal relationship. 這裡的寫得很好

    9. During labor education, we can even get acquainted with a great number of different friends. As a result of our help, our campus will become clean.
    我覺得as a result of...become clean在這兒顯得多餘, 因為同一段你已提過了, 所以這一段的結尾不要有這個ending會更好

    10 As soon as I think I will final labor education, I am in a good mood.
    final不是動詞喔

    10
    I believe most people except that the labor education can end soon.

    是expect不是except

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